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Hallo es wäre sehr nett, wenn mir jemand diesen Text auf Rechtschreibung korrigieren könnte. Ich brauche ihn für die Schule.
Für Kritik oder Verbesserungsvorschläge bin auch ich immer offen !

Dear WADA, (World-Anti-Doping-Agency)
At first I wanted to tell you that I appreciate your commitment according your contribution to fight against doping in sports. I write this letter to notify you that I totally agree with you. I think it is pointless to use doping-substences in sports to increase one’s performance in order to achieve a certain level or to have a good ranking position. An important aspect is that the health of the competition participants falls into oblivion and I wanted to emphasize especially on this aspect, because I do not think it is a good idea to get sick for the sake of gaining glory. Another aspect is that the fairness in regard of the competition is suffering. Athletes claim that it is already to use certain substances to keep pace with other athletes, because every athlete is doing this and it would be unfair to use nothing to some extent. Anyway, by closer consideration this theory is not acceptable even though we are mindful of their opinions. We have to claim for fairness in sports or even demand that of the sportsman. It is my demand to call on them to stay clean. It is important to make them aware of the risks and that is not worth it to put ones health at risk.
Yours Faithfully,

XXX

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Answer by HySt2812
((my personal remark)) xxx delete/löschen, replace by suggestion/ersetzen durch Vorschlag=>
From: Tina Anders
To: World Anti-Doping Agency
Re: Words of support for the Agency’s activities

Dear Sir or Madam,
xxxAt first=>First of all (( means another situation: “At first I loved him,later I found that he had another girlfriend”: So you changed your mind and did not see him anymore. Here you just want to stress the importance of your first point.I begin that way again:))
First of all I wanted to tell you that I appreciate your commitment according your contribution to fight against doping in sports. I write this letter to notify you that I totally agree with you. I think it is ?=>dishonest and deceitful to use doping xxxsubstences=>substances in sports to increase one’s performance in order to achieve a certain level or to have a good ranking position.
An important aspect is that the health of the?=> sportsmen=>will be seriously endangered .I wanted to emphasize especially xxx this aspect, because I do not think it is a good idea to get sick for the sake of gaining glory. ((A good way saying this!!)) Another aspect is that the =>aspect of fairness in regard of the competition is suffering. Athletes claim that it xxx=> has already become “normal” to use certain substances to keep pace
with other athletes, ?=>because each athlete presumes that every other athlete is doping anyway. ?=> ((I would not go that far to say that it would be unfair to use
nothing. That way of saying not only legalizes drug taking,
it declares it your duty to take them.Leave it out.)) Anyway, by closer xxx=>considering this theory, it is not
acceptable . (( Save the following sentence, of course you take the athletes’ serious, but not their opinions on doping.Do not forget:You have started the letter decidedly speaking a g a i n s t doping.)) We have to claim xxx=> fairness in sports ?=> and should even demand that of the sportsmen. It is =>not only my individual demand to call on them to stay clean, I am sure that my position is being supported by hundreds of thousands of people
worldwide. It is important to ?=> stress the various and heavy health risks for the athletes and appeal to them that a victory gained by illegal doping is not worth to put their health at risk and, let me add this: by doing so disappointing their friends and supporters
by dishonest dirty tricks.
Yours Faithfully,
T.A.

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